Wednesday, 9 October 2013

Cinematic Spaces Online Greenlight Review

Scribd has changed my font which is really quite upsetting, please, if you will, as you read this imagine it in American Typewriter.


  1. Hi Livi - this isn't OGR feedback, but I saw your Scribd lament re. font replacement; quick tip - export your document as a PDF prior to uploading, and then Scribd can't replace your fonts. I won't be feedback on here for a while, so if you want to take it down and try PDF-ing your original and re-uploading, you've got the time :) I'll be back on here soon.

  2. OGR 11/10/2013

    Hey Livi,

    A quick bit of general feedback; you've got a few typos in your OGR - for example *specious* instead of *species* - so do please proof-read before you publish; your mistakes are spelled correctly, which suggests your entrusting your meaning to a spell-checker - and that can be a fatal presumption!

    I'm encouraged by your OGR; there are some sweet, delicate thumbnails on your blog, and in terms of your visual concept - which is a bit woolly - the idea of always ensuring the horizon etc, is somehow hidden from view is a nice way of evoking the appeal of these sort of 'lost world' narratives. One really striking use of fog/mist to create a sense of mystery and potential menace is used in the computer game Limbo - if you're not familiar with it, check out this footage, and see how the world of the game sort of falls away into the mist:

    I think you could really push this layering/receding aesthetic that is already implied in your thumbnails. In terms of your treetop village, I actually like the more dynamic composition of 5 - because it makes us 'feel' the discovery of this unlikely conurbation - like we're the explorers. Remember that something as simple as a choice of point-of-view can add content/information to the thing depicted.

    The first world war tank - great - that's exactly the kind of joined-up thinking required by a concept-artist - real world reference and knowledge plus a bit of 'what if?' magic. The idea of using the machine itself as an element in that first establishing shot is a good move in terms of upping the cinematic ante, but just beware that we want to feel the vastness of that moment too - so don't get too preoccupied with the machine.

    I look forward to seeing you now really push your three scenes forward; lots more thumbnails on here, Livi - as of now - onwards!